D: "is that the 3rd left?"
they hear sirens.
"that was too easy" M said as cops cuffed D.
At M's home
STILL-SOB-COCKING-SHRIEK-BANG-SILENCE
count: 140 characters (including line breaks and spaces)
This is my first attempt at twit-fic. I don't know if I did it justice but anyway.
they hear sirens.
"that was too easy" M said as cops cuffed D.
At M's home
STILL-SOB-COCKING-SHRIEK-BANG-SILENCE
count: 140 characters (including line breaks and spaces)
This is my first attempt at twit-fic. I don't know if I did it justice but anyway.
Congrats on your first attempt. A good exploration of the narrative and in the formatting to give it another perspective.
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You did well!
ReplyDeleteI like the last line even though I'm really not sure what it's saying. This was really tense and vivid!
ReplyDeleteWhile he thought D was captured. His wife was shot when they received confirmation M was the spy.
DeleteAnd thanks again for the feedback
Thanks all for the feedback.
ReplyDeleteSome strong imagery from this one.. welcome!!
ReplyDeleteGreat to see you here - I've entered this fun challenge too.. http://annieevett.blogspot.com.au/2012/03/starved-fgc-2012-5.html
Interesting and evocative.
ReplyDeleteVery interesting storyline you've developed - with the limited space. Well done on a first attempt!
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